5.2.10

scientific evidence of an afterlife

A white room. A light. The voice of a god,

yes, but what about blood thick in the heart,

oxygen, orgasms, salt, a hot shower,

your mother and you in a rocking chair,

virgin fossils, babies that your belly fed,

what about an image of a white horse

and a deep pilgrimage, a gut feeling,

some relic in a jar, fingers crossed, wet

words hot in the mouth, slices of meat,

a left hand, in it a cave, a goddess of mercy,

the moon, two people, a love story,

with a dress, the smell of spring,

the lace of a mouth, an island,

a face in the bathroom mirror,

little boats, the wind knocks,

your whole body, on the porch,

carrying the sediment of evening,

then the sound of a tree, wings, hair,

lights for miles.

5 comments:

Joshua said...

Rosalyn!!! This is beautiful! What I love is that it's like a picture show. The use of "wet" at the end of the line causes the pause and then it leads to the rest of the image. Lovely. The only critique is with "orgasms," not because of its implications but it is difficult to say. I think making it singular could help. Oxygen, orgasm, salt, a hot shower. What if salt was first in the line. You give the sensoral experience leading to orgasm then hot shower. It is also great in the line that these are all pure things. They are simple, not artificial. It feels like that is a theme, the simplicity of this perception. I would almost play up the senses more. Say "rustle of the tree" instead of the sound of tree because we can hear more. Astounding, though. Might have to put up one I did in poetry class. Looks like you have found the right place for your gifts. Also, put up your deck project from first year. It is one of my favorite projects I have seen.

Kaitlyn said...

aaaand then i fell out of my chair.

when i read this poem it was like the words were melting.

mooresy said...

There's a round little moan in my mouth. Roz, this is so good ... "babies that your belly fed" is like a sound truffle.

And William Carlos Williams can eat your imagery dust.

Temps said...

You were holding out on me! This is our middle section. I agree, Orgasms could be singular.

Kaitlyn said...

sound truffle! i love it. thats exactly what this is.